Wednesday, September 03, 2003

Novena VII, version "B"

3.Sept.03
this marooned face
a spectral figure
walks the island's limits

the mask i wear
fractured ideal image
haunted by reality

sky skims sea
eyes foggy across horizon
task this foreign beard

one p.m.
Same core concepts (as best as I could remember them), played with later in the day. The first version seems more "brutal" in its relative lack of articles and paucity of verbs. This version seems equally dreamlike, but more narrative. In a manner of speaking.

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